Question by Kat: What do you think of my Story? Help!!!?
JAMES FLETCHER: The leader of the team. He is a good looking man mid thirties. He is tall, has brown hair and blue eyes. He has a slight Australian accent. Carries him self with a sarcastic humor, a cunning personality and he is Charming. His family was killed by a serial killer named Ticking Tom.
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DAVID PARKER: An attractive man early thirties. He is the tallest man on the team, about 6’4 he has blond hair. He is classy, modest, and is adventurous. He is clean cut and wears a suit, old money. He is very righteous and try’s to do the right thing.

JULIAN SCOTT: A clean cut man in his early twenties. He has brown hair and he is medium height. He is easily flustered and very knowledgeable. The guys on the team pick on him, but he doesn’t let it bother him. He is fun loving and loves to impress his boss.

WILLIAM COOPER: The youngest man on the team he is Italian. He is tall and gangly and has brown hair stubble on his chin. He is charming, aloof, caring and humorous. The is the class act on the team and doesn’t take his job to seriously.

SOPHIA DUNCAN: A woman in her late twenties, long blond hair. She is quite, reserved, smart and witty. She is well liked by the team and Fletcher makes fun of her most. She dresses fashionably but professionally.

Teaser
Washington Criminal Intelligence Unit. WCIU. Head office. Based in DC. Morning, 8:45 AM.

Parker
“Where is he?”
Camera pans around a group of people standing in a hallway. The hallway is dimly lit. None look to happy.

Cooper
“Forty Five minuets late on the first day. Can’t be a good sign.”

Today standing in the hallway of a building, stood James Fletcher’s new team. James was an interrogator, an expert in his line of study. He hand picked his own team of protégées, four, fine men and women. The only problem was, he was no where to be found.

Duncan
“Maybe he forgot.”

Parker
“I’m leaving if he is not here in 10 minuets.”

Cooper digs in his pocket for his phone.
“Does anyone have his number?”

They all shake their heads no.

Cooper
“I heard he’s like, really old… maybe that’s why he is late.”

Scott looks doubtfully at Cooper.
“He is not a dinosaur.”

Parker
“Have you ever met him?”

Scotts face is an obvious no. He looks worried.
“No, Have you?”

Parker frowns.
“This could be bad.”
The team stands quietly.

Suddenly a man comes striding calmly down the hallway. His brown hair is cut short and bright blue eyes dance down the hallway, he’s tall and carries himself proudly. He flashes a smile at the team when he gets near.

Fletcher
“What did I miss?”

Parker not realizing that his boss is standing in front of him.
“Nothing. The old man isn’t here yet.”

Fletcher
“On the contrary, He is standing right in front of you.”

Fletcher has dark blue jeans on, and a black stylish trench coat. He continues to stare at David Parker… waiting.

Cooper speaks first.
“You’re late.”

Fletcher Sarcastic
“Maybe you’re early.”
Cooper pulls his eyebrows together. Fletcher grabs the metal
door knob next to him and goes to open it.

Scott.
“Actually. My clock says you are exactly Fifty one minuets late.”
He adjusts his wrist watch and looks proud of him self.

Fletcher turns around and gives him an odd look.

Fletcher.
“May I see it?”
He holds out his hand, and Scott gives it to him.
He turns over the electronic watch in his hands, looking at it carefully.

Scott
“It cost me a fortune! Not only can it tell time, it is a recorder, stop watch, and a compass.”

Fletcher
“Wow, mine doesn’t even work.”
Doesn’t offer further explanation.

Fletcher opens the door next to him and steps inside. The team follows him inside; a metal table is inside with five chairs around it is positioned in the middle of the room. The room is painted black with no windows but the two way glass. In the corner of the room a small desk with a wheelie chair, is pushed up against the wall. On the desk is a large stack of papers and small models of luxury cars.

The team takes their places and stare up at James Fletcher.

Fletcher
“So, what do you know about me?”

Silence.

Fletcher off their looks.
“What do you want to know about me?”

Parker
“Where did you graduate University?”

Fletcher
“I haven’t.”

Parker
“You’re joking.”

Fletcher Sarcastic. Looks slightly hurt.
“I don’t find it a particularly funny matter. Who happens to be the boss?”
He sits down in the wheelie chair.
“Next question.”
Wheels around the table smiling.

Duncan
“How does a man like your self, get to be the leading expert in interrogating criminals, with no education?”

Fletcher
“It’s a long story Blondie.” He smiles charmingly at her. She frowns back at him.
He scoots beside Cooper.
“Your turn.”

Cooper
“Why were you late today?”

Fletcher
“My clocks don’t work.”

Cooper
“Why not?”

Fletcher frowns slightly.
“Long story.”
He scoots around the table.
“You guys ask all the ha

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Answer by The Stig
I like the movie script/play format you have used.
I also think that this could be developed further because it was interesting.

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